Unclear: Voyager Public Charter School will transform education in Hawaii by demonstrating... Why: Similar to above how will Voyager transform "Voyager uses state of the art methods founded on ancient principles and the latest scientific knowledge... Why: These methods are extremely unclear and left to imagination. What are the ancient methods? And are these Western methods or based in Hawaiian cultural practices? Similarly lates scientific data - what is this specifically? Are these methods used or relied upon to aid education growth? as articulated in the Hawaii Content and Performance Standards and Common Core State Standards " "ancient principles -> I would love to know which ancient principles or to get some sense of them. "latest scientific knowledge much better This is clear & why we want to be a part of the VCS Legacy. Clear education in Hawaii How voyager innovating The first two sentences feel unclear because they are long. hawaii content and performance standards state art methods ancient principles Hawaii? Unclear: Voyager uses founded on latest scientific knowledge I think little would benefit from being more specific Awesome! "Hawaii Content Performance Standards - what do these refer currently. some examples that to? its philosophy considered VPCS' philosophy?" am as entails Not sure how you will when referring existing common core requirements. Shouldn’t your sharing shared with than public school. Maybe model for different type learning. N/A "state = vague forms utilizes variety partnerships share other schools. why?" Hawaii"" -> Are there any ways trying education? "I Mission statement too long unclear. No need “ help every student …expectation” . school should be. term “ancient principles” Does this based methodologies included original charter (ex. Feurenstien’s Instrumental Enrichment)? methods"" "" providing few Voyager's may clarify students can achieve high expectations.